• Cheradenine@sh.itjust.works
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    9 months ago

    Bring it up in the edits.

    The lead in is very poorly written, the next section “Background” seems fine though.

  • JubilantJaguar@lemmy.world
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    9 months ago

    The overweight rambling lead is unfortunately a bit of a common problem. I would do something to fix it (this is one of my usual topics) but alas I’m not keen to blow my cover here! It might get a tidy-up if you lobby for it hard enough on the talk page. Alternatively, consider doing it yourself, just make sure to announce your plans first.